04-09-2024, 05:28 PM
Character: Ezra
Event: sanfey's adventure to fun land
Responsiveness: Smonk was very responsive both during the event and in the lead up to the event, taking into account people's various schedules and whatnot and also the time the event took and their sleepy-meter. Only thing I'd like to see in the future is the narrates taking into account the actions of the party. i.e: During the first Demon General since people let me take it out in RP, I roleplayed being swallowed and then having a bunch of crystals explode it from the inside out. The narrate didn't reflect this. It would have been a good inclusion; not a huge deal mind you just something to keep in mind!!
Balance: Do not be afraid to down people! Be mean! I feel like the last boss was pretty on the nose for the balance, but even that could have been tweaked to be a touch stronger. You've got it in you, I believe. It eventually comes with experience so don't worry!!
Storytelling: For this it feels like we skimmed the surface of a story, or rather, read the Amazon Synopsis of it but didn't receive any deep details. Why did Godrik do what he did for example, what were his motivations? WHO summoned the Demon Generals? What were they after in the end? Just ore? Something more? What was the purpose of the gate? Things like that - you can tie things in together in a nice cohesive story with all of these little bits and pieces. Again, the story was like the Amazon Synopsis of a great book, but I didn't have enough money to buy said book.
Overall: Needs a bit more work but overall I do not have major complaints. The above is merely advice for the future for you!
Event: sanfey's adventure to fun land
Responsiveness: Smonk was very responsive both during the event and in the lead up to the event, taking into account people's various schedules and whatnot and also the time the event took and their sleepy-meter. Only thing I'd like to see in the future is the narrates taking into account the actions of the party. i.e: During the first Demon General since people let me take it out in RP, I roleplayed being swallowed and then having a bunch of crystals explode it from the inside out. The narrate didn't reflect this. It would have been a good inclusion; not a huge deal mind you just something to keep in mind!!
Balance: Do not be afraid to down people! Be mean! I feel like the last boss was pretty on the nose for the balance, but even that could have been tweaked to be a touch stronger. You've got it in you, I believe. It eventually comes with experience so don't worry!!
Storytelling: For this it feels like we skimmed the surface of a story, or rather, read the Amazon Synopsis of it but didn't receive any deep details. Why did Godrik do what he did for example, what were his motivations? WHO summoned the Demon Generals? What were they after in the end? Just ore? Something more? What was the purpose of the gate? Things like that - you can tie things in together in a nice cohesive story with all of these little bits and pieces. Again, the story was like the Amazon Synopsis of a great book, but I didn't have enough money to buy said book.
Overall: Needs a bit more work but overall I do not have major complaints. The above is merely advice for the future for you!
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